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Still feels very...bouncy...to me. I think it's your picking technique. Your right and left hands aren't completely in sync with one another, on any of these videos, and it makes the whole thing feel really choppy.
Not bashing here, just giving constructive criticism.
I liked the tone on CSTW and the 2nd version of the "swing" bit. After watching a lot of your videos, your tone is very good, gear-wise, but it doesn't seem you're getting any from your fingers.
And I agree with the earlier posters in saying lay back a bit, really feel the rhythm. Don't try to rush so much, seems you're doing that at times.

I think the other thing that would help you a lot is to connect your notes together a bit more. That may be a lot of the reason it sounds so choppy to me. Work on your hammer ons, pull offs, slides, etc. The whole thing needs to flow a lot more than it is right now.
I liked the chords/melody line of the swing bit you did.